Choose a passage (at least four sentences long) from either "Rapunzel" or "Snow White" and rewrite the passage so that it contains: 1) a simple sentence 2) a compound sentence 3) a complex sentence and 4) a compound-complex sentence.
Because Rapunzel was locked away in a tower for the majority of her life, she became very scared when an unfamiliar man appeared. The man was very kind. He said that he could not stop thinking about Rapunzel, and he said she was very beautiful. The young man, who was actually a prince, asked the shy girl if she would marry him, and she said yes.
When the queen heard these words, she began to tremble, and her face turned green with envy. From that moment on, she hated Snow White. Her heart turned cold like a stone. Weeds grew in her heart; she could not sleep.
In the evening, the seven dwarfs came home; they saw their beloved Snow White lying on the ground. They were horrified. Since she wasn't moving at all, they were sure she was dead. They lifted her up, and they saw that she had been laced too tightly; they cut the staylace in two.
Now, the poor child was all alone in the vast forest, and she was so frightened. Having no idea where to turn, she just stared at all the leaves on the trees. She started running. She ran as far as her legs could carry her, and when night fell, she found a small cottage to rest in.
There was one a man and a woman who wanted a child. God was about to grant there desire and they would soon become parents. These people had a little window at the back of their house, where beautiful flowers could be seen. It was, however, surrounded by a high wall, and no one dared go into it because it belonged to an enchantress, who had great power and was dreaded by all the world.
The seven dwarfs came home in the evening. They saw their beloved Snow White lying on the ground, and they were horrified. After seeing that she wasn’t moving at all, they were sure she was dead. They lifted her up and saw that she had been laced too tightly, so they cut the stay lace in two.
In the final sentence, "so" is serving as a coordinating conjunction, rather than a subordinating conjunction. How can you rework the sentence so that it more clearly incorporates a dependent clause?
Rapunzel grew to become a very beautiful child. The enchantress put her in a tower in the middle of the forest when she was twelve years old. The tower had no stairs or doors, but there was a window in the tower. When the enchantress wanted to come in, she went under the window, and she yelled out to Rapunzel: 'Rapunzel, Rapunzel, Let down your hair for me.'
It eventually came to pass that the king's son rode through the forest, and he passed by the tower. Then he heard a song. It was so beautiful, and he stopped to listen. It was Rapunzel, who in her solitude passed her time in letting her sweet voice resound. The king's son wanted to climb up to her, and looked for the door of the tower, but none was to be found. He went home, but the singing had so deeply touched his heart, that every day he went out into the forest and listened to it.
As nightfall overcame the town, the man climbed over the enchantress' wall. He hastily retrieved a handful of rampion, and he then proceeded to bring it to his anxiously-waiting wife. She immediately made a salad of the root vegetable. The rampion completely satisfied the woman, and she quickly began to crave it three times as much as she had before, putting her husband in a very difficult position.
Because Rapunzel was locked away in a tower for the majority of her life, she became very scared when an unfamiliar man appeared. The man was very kind. He said that he could not stop thinking about Rapunzel, and he said she was very beautiful. The young man, who was actually a prince, asked the shy girl if she would marry him, and she said yes.
ReplyDeleteHow could you rework the final sentence so that it incorporates a dependent clause?
DeleteWhen the queen heard these words, she began to tremble, and her face turned green with envy. From that moment on, she hated Snow White. Her heart turned cold like a stone. Weeds grew in her heart; she could not sleep.
ReplyDeleteNice job!
DeleteIn the evening, the seven dwarfs came home; they saw their beloved Snow White lying on the ground. They were horrified. Since she wasn't moving at all, they were sure she was dead. They lifted her up, and they saw that she had been laced too tightly; they cut the staylace in two.
ReplyDeleteHow could you revisit the punctuation to avoid comma splices?
DeleteNow, the poor child was all alone in the vast forest, and she was so frightened. Having no idea where to turn, she just stared at all the leaves on the trees. She started running. She ran as far as her legs could carry her, and when night fell, she found a small cottage to rest in.
ReplyDeleteNice job!
DeleteThere was one a man and a woman who wanted a child. God was about to grant there desire and they would soon become parents. These people had a little window at the back of their house, where beautiful flowers could be seen. It was, however, surrounded by a high wall, and no one dared go into it because it belonged to an enchantress, who had great power and was dreaded by all the world.
ReplyDeleteNice job with the sentence structures. But how could you avoid some of the typographical oversights?
DeleteThe seven dwarfs came home in the evening. They saw their beloved Snow White lying on the ground, and they were horrified. After seeing that she wasn’t moving at all, they were sure she was dead. They lifted her up and saw that she had been laced too tightly, so they cut the stay lace in two.
ReplyDeleteIn the final sentence, "so" is serving as a coordinating conjunction, rather than a subordinating conjunction. How can you rework the sentence so that it more clearly incorporates a dependent clause?
DeleteRapunzel grew to become a very beautiful child. The enchantress put her in a tower in the middle of the forest when she was twelve years old. The tower had no stairs or doors, but there was a window in the tower. When the enchantress wanted to come in, she went under the window, and she yelled out to Rapunzel: 'Rapunzel, Rapunzel, Let down your hair for me.'
ReplyDeleteNice job!
DeleteIt eventually came to pass that the king's son rode through the forest, and he passed by the tower. Then he heard a song. It was so beautiful, and he stopped to listen. It was Rapunzel, who in her solitude passed her time in letting her sweet voice resound. The king's son wanted to climb up to her, and looked for the door of the tower, but none was to be found. He went home, but the singing had so deeply touched his heart, that every day he went out into the forest and listened to it.
ReplyDeleteHow could you rework one of these sentences so that it is more obviously compound-complex?
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ReplyDeleteAs nightfall overcame the town, the man climbed over the enchantress' wall. He hastily retrieved a handful of rampion, and he then proceeded to bring it to his anxiously-waiting wife. She immediately made a salad of the root vegetable. The rampion completely satisfied the woman, and she quickly began to crave it three times as much as she had before, putting her husband in a very difficult position.
ReplyDeleteHow could you rework one of these sentences so that it is more obviously compound-complex?
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